Feedback
– Blank Canvas Pitch
This is the feedback we got regarding our pitch on Friday, the 4th of December, including the rehearsal shoot:
- Nice camera angles.
- Difficult to show a cut up body, however what if the painting was drawn in blood from the body on a canvas – people wouldn't expect that.
- Using the body to create the painting/sculpture – using the vicitim as material than rather cutting it up.
- Torture.
- Using a guy is a better idea (as the victim) as it isn't stereotypical.
- Location: Depends – if you want a studio, you can use the art room instead of just using the studio.
- Don't do the hallway thing, keep it in one location.
Our
response to the feedback:
- The new idea is that the victim is dead and that the psychopath is drawing in the victim's blood.
- Discarded the hallway idea, as it confuses the idea and doesn't tie in with the other idea.
- Everything else is still the same, as the only thing we really had to change is what the killer was actually doing with the body, and how they interact with one another.
Our New Scene
Outline:
- Slowly introduced to our male psycho killer
- Show shots of his eyes, his hands, etc. to create tension
- Slow build up of shots that increase in importance
- As we go along we see the parts of the paintbrush, blood palette, etc.
- We then see the body
- The body is no longer suspended from the wall or a slab
- Body is now seated on a chair or lying on the floor, bloody and dying/dead.
- We see a scalpel lying somewhere, alongside knives and other weapons.
- In the end, the killer is shown manically smiling
- Obviously happy, shaking, sweat dripping down his head, and the canvas full of blood is shown.
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